The Simple Test That Will Tell You How Compelling Your First Chapter Is

deathIf you think the first chapter of your novel could use some improvement, there’s one simple test that can tell you how to make it better.

Kill the main character at the end of your first chapter.

This will tell you how compelling your first chapter is.

Write something like, “Jim slips off the bridge and falls to his death.”

Now your main character is finished. He can’t achieve any of his goals.

Next, list out all the consequences that come into effect since the main character can’t achieve their goals.

If the list is short and lacklustre, it’s a good sign that your first chapter has room for improvement.

The consequences matters because they give the reader an idea of what’s at stake. The larger the stake, the more compelled your reader will be to find out what happens next.

A great example is Katniss Everdeen from Suzanne Collins’ The Hunger Games.

Let’s kill her at the start of the novel and see what happens.

“The train to District 1 crashes and Katniss Everdeen dies.”

Now what consequences come into play if Katniss can’t accomplish her main goal?

Main Goal:

  • Take her sister’s place in The Hunger Games and survive.

Consequences:

  • Primrose will be taken to The Hunger Games instead and Primrose will surely die because she’s young and doesn’t possess any archery skills like Katniss.
  • Gale will be heartbroken now that his crush is dead.
  • Peeta will be heartbroken now that his crush is dead, plus he’s going to die himself in The Hunger Games without any purpose to live any more.
  • Katniss’ mother will likely have a heart attack because Katniss is dead, and now Primrose will be sent to The Hunger Games and die too.

The consequences of Katniss’ death are very high and the reader doesn’t want any of those things to happen. The reader eagerly turns each page to find out what happens next, because Katniss must accomplish her goal above all cost.

A great thing about this test is that you can keep killing your main character at the end of each chapter to see if the consequences are still high enough to keep the reader engaged.

As in The Hunger Games, each chapter proves to test Katniss’ ability to survive and raises the consequences even higher:

  • Katniss becomes a symbol of hope to all the Districts, she can’t die!
  • Katniss respects Rue’s death, she can’t die, because of the huge emotional pull Katniss’ action has on the reader now.
  • Katniss develops conflicting feelings about Gale and Peeta, the reader must know who she chooses.
  • etc.

A lot of emerging authors don’t realize that the consequences must be clear from the start. It’s why most first-time novels don’t make it. It’s why mine didn’t.

When I finished my first novel, The Moon King, I used the first few chapters to introduce the setting, characters, and the main character’s goal, but I didn’t spell out the consequences until later chapters.

The initial feedback I got was very telling. It was to the effect of, “The first half is boring and drudges along, but the second half is super exciting and I couldn’t stop reading.”

Now that I’ve learned about building up consequences right away using the “Kill the main character” test, I’m editing my first few chapters to be much more compelling.

If you think that your first chapter could use some improvement, simply kill the main character and list out the consequences that you’ve written about so far.

If there aren’t many, or they aren’t very high, then you may need to do a rewrite.

Here’s a simple template you can use to do the test on your chapters (it’s a downloadable word doc)
kill-the-mc-test

Happy writing!

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6 Comments Add yours

  1. freespirit says:

    There is always some little trick when you run out of ideas on a storyline, yes.

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  2. Great post, Terry. I like your test. I’m going to use it!

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    1. Terry Ibele says:

      Thanks 🙂 Let me know how it works out.

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  3. JJAzar says:

    Thought-provoking post, Terry. I made sure to subscribe for more of your content.
    The beginning of a novel is so crucial to hooking both the reader and the publisher. Making the stakes clear from the get-go is a great tip that I’ll have to apply to my beginnings. I often have a tendency to reveal layers of a story slowly, but the beginning of a story does need to have enough drama to it in terms of stakes.
    I too am on a journey to get written work out there (just fired up a blog myself). I plan on reading what you have posted of the Moon King (I’m a massive fan of Robert Jordan’s Wheel of Time fantasy series) at a time when my eyelids aren’t closing against my will. Cheers, and best of luck with your writing endeavors

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    1. Terry Ibele says:

      I have that same tendency to reveal things slowly. A lot of the first feedback I got on my novel was that I reveal everything at the end. It was good and bad. Good, because the ending was great. Bad, because everyone felt frustrated since I just kept opening more loops throughout.

      Thanks for the well wishes. All the best with your writing too. I also subbed your blog. I love making connections with other writers and best of luck with your writing too 😀

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